Extra comments:
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(50) “The uncovering of recent frauds” >> Don’t conflate fraud with reproducibility issues. Fraud is a crime. It’s unhelpful to lump it into the issues addressed in this paper.
(50) “irreproducibility facts and concerns… “>> awkward; should it be “irreproducible” (the adjective form)? Should it be “results” rather than “facts”?
(51) “have enforced” >> who has enforced? Unclear who is the subject of this sentence (“the uncovering”?). Maybe say “have led to new requirements.”
(51) “major Computational Science journals” >> delete “major” and remove capitalization
(53) “SVC is witnessing a large growth in adoption” >> do you have any data to support such a statement? If not, avoid.
(57) “a form of version control” > the parallel with version control is tenuous; the tools do provenance capture, and scientific workflow management.
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(12) “improved open access” >> open access is a different problem, not addressed by version control (address elsewhere in the text)
(39) “large amount of funding that is currently being channeled into…” >> do you have data to support this? If not, re-phrase accordingly.
(42) “the current standard”>> there is no standard; rephrase.
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(27) “these tools are experiencing rapid adoption” >> do you have data to back this up? If not, re-phrase.
(50 “the front end is designed … commonly used web browsers” >> Seems irrelevant for the paper, and is just good practice. Delete.
References:
Ref. 12 is a 404 webpage. Only cite public sources.
Copy edits:
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(24) “greatly increasing the pace” >> delete “greatly” (subjective, hyperbolical)
(28) “significantly enhance” >> delete “significantly” (idem)
(34) “Acutely, SVC is not designed” >> delete “Acutely” (subjective)
(36) “Currently, there are many efforts focused on developing computational version control (CVC) tools to help scientists… “ >> Several current efforts are underway to develop tools for computational provenance, aimed at helping scientists … (remove syntactic expletive “there are” and avoid coining a new term).
(38) “adequately address” >> delete “adequately” (unnecessary adverb)
(40 “the broader tracking issues” >> delete “broader” (unnecessary modifier)
With this sample set of copy edits, the authors should work through the rest of the paper looking for similar subjective wording, and unnecessary modifiers.